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PostPosted: Tue Dec 06, 2016 3:41 am 
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Those are neat, the four i read.

They are very flitting in the mind.

Mellow and unforceful.


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PostPosted: Tue Dec 06, 2016 11:47 pm 
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Looks cool. I can't say I appreciate this style of poetry all that much, but I think it's great that you're putting your work out there.

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PostPosted: Mon Dec 12, 2016 8:28 pm 
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i have purchased your small book, dooooooooooor

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PostPosted: Mon Jan 23, 2017 7:18 pm 
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the book arrived. it's good but short. i think that applies to almost every piece in here. small firecrackers of vibrant visual imagery. the reader is left wanting. an ungenerous reader would ask whether or not it is cowardice that keeps your poems short; there appears to be a hard, vacuum-seal limit around the forty word mark. you lean very much on your (well-refined) gift for these small prestidigitations but the effect is a series of colorful whiffleballs that bounce off the reader. i'd like a hook. i'd like a narrative; some exist here but those that do are fleeting, the lede clearly buried somewhere off-page. you have a very good ear and a very good eye. i am glad i bought your small book

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